bodies release melatonin around 11pm H u m a n i t i e s

# Just tell them what do you think about their topic. 5-6 sentence for each feedback.

please do not use he/she.. give them feedback just like you are judging them.

1. The persuasive speech I’m going to critique is of Severn
Suzuki’s speech when she was 12 years old in 1992 to United Nations.
This video had me pretty emotional, its great and I suggest checking it
out.

The girl who silenced the world at the U.N. for 5 minutes (Links to an external site.)

Severn starts her speech by reminding the UN who they are- a
group of 12 and 13 year olds. Her hook is just that. She also includes
in her hook that her and the children have saved all the money to get
them to the UN themselves. She then immediately calls for action;
following up with the reason for her group’s trip to the UN. She goes on
to say she is speaking for all children when she asks the UN to do
something about pollution and destruction of the earth in the name of
wealth. Her main points are fixing what the “adults” have done, but also
to stop furthering it. Severn states that it’s up to the wealthy
countries to stop the destruction and share the wealth.

Severn’s strengths is her passionate voice. She speaks with such sorrow and anger; yet confident and determined.

2.

The
speech I chose to critique is a speech by Wendy Troxel on Why Schools
Should Start Later for Teens. There were a few hooks at the beginning
and a call to action at the end as well. In my opinion, the hooks and
her call to action were effective. The content of her speech was rich
with very important points to support her argument. She used a personal
story of her 14 year old son to find a common ground with the audience.

One of her supporting points was about a study conducted of “over
30,000 high school students, and found that for each hour of lost sleep,
there was a 38% increase in feeling sad and hopeless, and a 58%
increase suicide attempts”. This statistics support the speaker’s main
point in the sense that a study has actually been done by seasoned
scholars. I really enjoyed listening to the speaker and I think her
strength is her ability to change the tone of her voice to reflect the
emotion she is conveying. Good speech overall.

3.

The persuasive speech I am going to critique is a TedTalk by Wendy Troxel titled “Why should school start later for teens.”

Why school should start later for teens | Wendy Troxel (Links to an external site.)

I chose this video because I have always said I think school times
should because I’ve always agreed that school should have a later start
time. Wendy starts her speech with an amazing hook as she gives us
insight into her morning routine as she tries to wake up her 14 year
old son as he’s sound to sleep. Then she gives examples of how her
friends wake up their children and it really catches your attention.

Wendy shares that waking teens up before their biological clock tells
them of they’re ready is robbing them of their dreams associated with
learning, memory, and emotional processing. 1 in 10 teenagers get the
recommended 8hrs of sleep and the 8hrs is the bare minimum. Major
organizations recommend that school should start at 8:30am instead of
7:30am or earlier. These start times have a direct effect on how little
sleep teens are getting. Studies show once a teen reaches puberty their
bodies release melatonin around 11pm which is 2 hours later than adults
and young children. She also share that the things teenager go through
that we often overlook such as moodiness, laziness, irritable, and
depression could be apart of sleep deprivation. In order for teens to
cope they get caffeine or energy drinks.

Her call to action was showing how the researchers in this field of
study said that later start times has a positive outcome. If the school
opens later the children’s wake up time get extended and their bedtime
will remain the same. School absences drop by 25% and test score
increase. Schools who have implemented these start times have seen major
improvement in students.

I think her points were very effective and she gave supporting
details to show proof that starting later does improve teenagers in
school and home. Wendy was a very strong speaker. I like her delivery
and her tone. She kept you engaged and you could feel she is passionate
about what she saying.